Snippet Sunday – Hard-Boiled/Noir WIP – March 27, 2016
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This week’s snippet picks up right where we left off- with Jake and Marisa in Beau’s Bar & Grill. The presence of Marisa’s ex and his friends threatens to complicate their evening.
Unsure of exactly what he’s stumbled into, Jake has just asked Marisa, “What happens to you if I walk out of here alone?”
“You’re not gonna do that, are you, Jake?” she asked. “Walk out of here alone?”
“Does that worry you?”
She took some time to consider her answer. The clash of conflicting emotions on her face reminded me of a six car pileup on the Jersey Turnpike.
“It’s not what you think, Jake.”
I gave her some time to reconsider her answer.
“All right,” she relented, “it is what you think. But it only happened once and I took care of the problem myself.”
She starting talking faster. Faster and louder.
“After he knocked me around the house that night I hid out on the porch and waited for him to do what he always does after a big night.”
“Drinks too much beer and falls asleep on the couch. I waited ’til he started snoring, then got the shotgun out of the truck, went on in, and jammed it right up into his crotch.”
“Very effective,” I said.
“I promised him a twelve-gauge vasectomy if he didn’t swear to never put his hands on me like that again.”
“And he’s held up his end of the deal?”
“More or less.”
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