Snippet Sunday – Hard-Boiled/Noir WIP – October 25, 2015
Snippet Sunday is a Facebook group for writers I’ve been privileged enough to have been accepted into.
From the group guidelines; “Welcome to Snippet Sunday, where writers come together to share a few sentences of their current project–whether it’s a recently released novel, a WIP (work in progress), or an older manuscript that’s being revived. Intended to hook readers, gather feedback and build an author’s fan base, Snippet Sunday is the FB group that does all three.”
This week’s snippet is from a scene that may or may not get cut. I’m not sure I can work the plot twist in, but it’s been fun playing with the idea…
The room went quiet.
I could hear the foundation sighing as it sank a little deeper into the sea-softened earth. The overhead florescent lighting wheezed and hummed. A sink at the far end of the room counted off the seconds in drops of water.
I blinked the double vision out of my eyes and looked at the coroner.
“Do it,” I said.
She nodded, then pulled back the sheet to reveal the dead woman’s head and shoulders.
The coroner stood by, eyes downcast in an attitude of professional patience.
I balled my fists as a wave of recognition rolled in.
Death had robbed Marisa’s skin of its warm golden hue. It dulled her easy, mischievous smile.
It had also removed her freckles and straightened her nose.
I leaned in for a closer look. Everything but the nose and those freckles looked right.
“Let me see her feet,” I said.
The coroner looked at me with questions in her bespectacled eyes.
“Do you want her identified or not?” I asked.
She stared a little longer, then moved to the other end of the table and lifted the sheet.
The dead woman had the word, “Ruthless”, tattooed on the instep of her right foot.
“It’s not her,” I said. I repeated myself before she could ask if I was sure, then walked out of the autopsy room and kept on walking until I found air that didn’t stink of death and formaldehyde.
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