#SnippetSunday – Hard-Boiled/Noir WIP – June 7, 2015

Snippet Sunday is a Facebook group for writers I’ve been privileged enough to have been accepted into.

From the group guidelines; “Welcome to Snippet Sunday, where writers come together to share a few sentences of their current project–whether it’s a recently released novel, a WIP (work in progress), or an older manuscript that’s being revived. Intended to hook readers, gather feedback and build an author’s fan base, Snippet Sunday is the FB group that does all three.”

This week’s and snippet is another slice of the conversation between Jake and Jed in the bar… Jed has just revealed that he and Marisa were married, but the relationship is on the rocks…

Beau arrived with my beer.

“Get you something, Jed?” he asked, setting the pint glass in front of me.

The big man glanced in the proprietor’s general direction.

“A little privacy’d be nice,” he said.

“This is a small town, buddy,” replied Beau, chuckling and shaking his head. “You know better.”

He didn’t hang around to hear Jed’s retort.

I drank some beer and watched as Jed stared at something only he could see. The longest two years of his life, perhaps.

“Ever heard of something called, ‘divorce’?” I asked him.

“Working on it,” he groaned. “Been separated for a couple of months now. We’re good.”

He looked up to see if I was still listening.

“We don’t hate each other,” he continued. “It’s not like that. We talk, even hang out, sometimes.”

“Like old friends.”

“Yeah, I guess.”

Beau walked back to our table, put a glass of beer in front of Jed, then walked away without saying a word.

“So what was all that grabbing and shoving in your truck about?” I asked. “Didn’t look friendly to me.”

He dropped his head and stared at the scratched, stained tabletop.

“Brass tacks, man,” I said. “You didn’t come to me for marital advice.”

He drank off half of his beer, then looked me in the eye.

“I want to hire you, Jake.”

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Posted on June 7, 2015, in Uncategorized. Bookmark the permalink. 13 Comments.

  1. Oh … can’t wait to find out what for. great snippet!

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  2. Outstanding –> “I drank some beer and watched as Jed stared at something only he could see. The longest two years of his life, perhaps.” Great snippet, Jeff. 🙂

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  3. Yes! This is excellent, Jeff–as always. Perfect lines, perfect tone, and perfect plot point. 🙂

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  4. Uh oh. What does he nees to hire him for?

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  5. This line is totally awesome: “Jed stared at something only he could see. The longest two years of his life, perhaps.”

    I love the natural flow of the conversation — and Beau’s comment about small towns is so true!

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  6. A nice piece of past, present and future here, Jeff. And… the future’s looking dangerous.

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  7. Awesome! Now we find out why he needs a PI.

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  8. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Enjoyed the snippet and learning a bit more about their complicated relationship. And I can’t wait to find out why he needs to hire him.

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  9. Very natural sounding conversation, I felt as if I was sitting there with them. Excellent excerpt!

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  10. Nice snippet. Absolutely love the line about the longest two years of his life!

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  11. chellecordero

    Great easy conversation between the two, very believable. Wonder what he wants to hire him to do – surveillance, a hit, so many possibilities. Leaves me very curious.

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  12. Love Beau’s line about being in a small town and the conversation between them.

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  13. Now that’s an interesting turn of events and pretty unexpected too.

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