#SnippetSunday – Hard-Boiled/Noir WIP – March 15, 2015
Snippet Sunday is a Facebook group for writers I’ve been privileged enough to have been accepted into.
From the group guidelines; “Welcome to Snippet Sunday, where writers come together to share a few sentences of their current project–whether it’s a recently released novel, a WIP (work in progress), or an older manuscript that’s being revived. Intended to hook readers, gather feedback and build an author’s fan base, Snippet Sunday is the FB group that does all three.”
This week’s snippet picks up right where last week’s left off… Jake woke up alone in the middle of the night. Marisa is gone. He goes to investigate the situation, trying to wake up, listening for clues…
A big engine idled in the parking lot, close to the building. The steady thrum made it hard to hear the conversation taking place outside my door.
Marisa’s voice was easy to pick out. I didn’t recognize the other one.
They didn’t sound like old friends remembering the good times.
I made for the front window, stubbing my toe on a table leg on the way. I swallowed profanity as I took a peek through the blinds.
Marisa stood with her back to the door, looking better in my shirt and shorts than I ever had. Her pal was a big, bald man in a white wifebeater and camouflage pants.
He cast a huge shadow on the moonlit blacktop.
A red pickup truck, with its engine running, occupied the spot to the left of my door.
The argument got hotter. Marisa was winning on points, but the guy made his words count– when he was able to get them in.
I hustled across the room, stubbing my toe again, to my duffel bag, fished out a pair of jeans, and pulled them on. I reached back in after zipping up and dug around the bottom until I found a small leather satchel. I opened the satchel, removing my Browning .22 and my blackjack.
The argument outside got louder.
I took another second to think about it, then dropped the gun back into the bag and headed for the door, blackjack in hand.
Thanks, as always, for reading, and thanks for any feedback you feel inclined to leave.