#SnippetSunday – As Yet Unnamed WIP (Vigilante/Noir) – November 30, 2014

Snippet Sunday is a Facebook group for writers I’ve been privileged enough to have been accepted into.

From the group guidelines;

“Welcome to Snippet Sunday, where writers come together to share a few sentences of their current project–whether it’s a recently released novel, a WIP (work in progress), or an older manuscript that’s being revived. Intended to hook readers, gather feedback and build an author’s fan base, Snippet Sunday is the FB group that does all three.”

This week’s snippet comes from a scene later on in the story.

Meyer, after going after the men who attacked Danny– and getting his ass kicked by more opponents than he could handle at once– is recovering in Satsuke’s apartment. He’s in no shape to go charging out again, though that’s what he wants to do. Satsuke has other ideas…

The clock-radio on the nightstand was useless to me as a time-telling device. Satsuke had draped a red silk handkerchief over the clock to prevent me from obsessing over the time.

She wanted me to be present in the moment, not looking forward, not thinking back.

“There will be time for reflection,” she’d said before we went to bed, “and there will be a time for planning your response. Now is not that time.”

I’d made my case that it was the perfect time to consider the next move. She’d shut down my argument with the same clear, measured brutality she’d used against my captors back at the warehouse.

“No,” she’d said in summation, “it is the anger that is driving you, anger and pain. You cannot succeed with those dominating your every thought.”

“So I’m supposed to strip all emotion out of this?” I’d asked.

“Emotion is a reason behind action, and only a reason. Emotion is the why. It cannot be allowed to rule the how.”

Thanks for stopping by!


Posted on November 30, 2014, in Uncategorized. Bookmark the permalink. 9 Comments.

  1. Emotion is the why. It cannot be allowed to rule the how. — I love this!


  2. Great snippet this week, Jeff!
    Love this one “She wanted me to be present in the moment, not looking forward, not thinking back.”


  3. I like this woman, Jeff. You’ve written her very, very well—her actions and words are pitch perfect! 🙂


  4. Love that last sentence. Very true!


  5. Great snippet and lots of tension between them.


  6. She sounds wise, but she also sounds like a tough cookie.


  7. Loved the snippet and the wise words.


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