#SnippetSunday – As Yet Unnamed WIP (Vigilante/Noir) – November 16, 2014

Snippet Sunday is a Facebook group for writers I’ve been privileged enough to have been accepted into.

From the group guidelines;

“Welcome to Snippet Sunday, where writers come together to share a few sentences of their current project–whether it’s a recently released novel, a WIP (work in progress), or an older manuscript that’s being revived. Intended to hook readers, gather feedback and build an author’s fan base, Snippet Sunday is the FB group that does all three.”

This week’s snippet is a slice from a fight scene that takes place later in the story. Meyer has just discovered a badly beaten Danny on the floor of his apartment. He arrives in time to see someone running away from the scene and gives chase. The chase takes him several blocks, ending at a second floor pool hall. He has to fight his way up the stairs to get where he wants to go…

I dropped my shoulder and bull rushed the first man in line. I caught him low down on the torso, driving him up and back and into the guy behind him.
Their legs tangled as each man fought a losing battle to maintain his footing.
I grabbed the first man by the front of his black tee shirt and yanked him off his unsteady feet. He tumbled, headlong and cursing, down the stairs.
The second man, a tall, thin guy with a buzz cut and a Hitler mustache, recovered enough to tag me with a chopping right hand.
A white hot flash of pain went off above my left eye. My vision turned bright yellow, then red.
I paid him back with a fast combination, ripping him with hard shots to the body.
He doubled over, into the path of my right hand.
Bloody teeth hit the steps and skittered around.

Thanks for reading…

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Posted on November 16, 2014, in Uncategorized. Bookmark the permalink. 13 Comments.

  1. I want to know what’s going to happen next. Good snippet!

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  2. You give good action scenes, Jeff! Your choreography is excellent, and I truly appreciate that you allow your characters to sustain damage, too.

    Not that I wanted Danny beaten like that—get ’em, Meyer! Get ’em good!

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  3. Liked, Tweeted, shared on FB, and G+’d.

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  4. Intense scene. Great snippet

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  5. Interesting and detailed fight scene. I really enjoyed it. 🙂

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  6. A fight scene where someone actually gets hurt. That’s refreshing and well done.

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  7. wow, what a scene, very descriptive, very intense … well done.

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  8. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Great fight scene!

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  9. Awesome scene! Last line made me cringe. Can’t wait for more!

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