#SnippetSunday – As Yet Unnamed WIP (Vigilante/Noir) – October 12, 2014
Snippet Sunday is a Facebook group for writers I’ve been privileged enough to have been accepted into.
From the group guidelines;
“Welcome to Snippet Sunday, where writers come together to share a few sentences of their current project–whether it’s a recently released novel, a WIP (work in progress), or an older manuscript that’s being revived. Intended to hook readers, gather feedback and build an author’s fan base, Snippet Sunday is the FB group that does all three.”
This week’s snippet is a re-working of last week’s snippet– it’s the second half of the first fight we see Meyer in. I wasn’t happy with a lot of things in last week’s snippet & got some great advice from several readers (thank you!). So here’s take two of Meyer vs Rebar Guy…
I felt the wind on my face at about the same time I noticed Danny hustling my way. His good hand hovered near his hip.
I dropped into a clumsy crouch as a foot and a half of rebar sliced through the space where my head had been.
The swing and a miss sent Rebar Guy– a wiry army fatigue-wearing guy with a shaved head and a prominent chin– stumbling toward Danny.
I snapped off a low back kick before Rebar Guy regained his footing.
He howled as the ligaments in his right knee came apart.
I jumped on his back, forcing him down on his injured knee.
He howled some more and took blind, backwards swats at me with the rebar.
I threw my arm over his shoulder and around his neck, positioned my bicep against his throat, then squeezed.
He let go of the rebar. The clang of metal on sidewalk got lost in the cold silence of combat.
I braced my other forearm against the back his neck, increasing the pressure on his carotid arteries.
One last, desperate elbow found the mark, catching me low on the left side of my ribcage. I let my breath out through my teeth and tightened the choke hold.
Rebar Guy flailed for another few seconds, then went slack in my arms.
I let him fall, watching his chest for signs of respiration.
Thanks for reading!