#SnippetSunday – As Yet Unnamed WIP (Vigilante)(Noir) – September 14, 2014

Snippet Sunday is a Facebook group for writers I’ve been privileged enough to have been accepted into.

From the group guidelines;

“Welcome to Snippet Sunday, where writers come together to share a few sentences of their current project–whether it’s a recently released novel, a WIP (work in progress), or an older manuscript that’s being revived. Intended to hook readers, gather feedback and build an author’s fan base, Snippet Sunday is the FB group that does all three.”

This week’s snippet moves the action forward a bit. Danny and Meyer are on their way home– Meyer always sees his friend home before going home himself– after their conversation at the diner. When they arrive at Danny’s West 96th Street building they find someone waiting for them…

A guy the size of a phone booth stood by the stoop. The sweat on his big, shaved head caught and held the shine off the streetlight. The tattoos covering his arms showed as black and red smudges from where we stood. We didn’t need to be closer to identify the symbols and slogans in his ink.
The black wifebeater and camouflage pants completed the look.
Danny loosed twin streams of profanity, one Yiddish, one English.
“Expecting company?” I asked.
“I might have gone down to their pool hall and shot my mouth off,” he grumbled.
The Phone Booth began to pace, looking up and down the street as he moved.
“You might have,” I repeated.
“Doesn’t matter now. What’s the plan?”
“What makes you think I have a plan?”
He let out a big sigh, then stepped off the curb.
“Where do you think you’re going?” I demanded.
He stopped and turned his head back.
“I’m going home. These clowns are not going run me out of my own neighborhood.”
“You’re just going to walk over there? That’s your plan?”
“That’s it,” he growled. “Don’t like it? Come up with a better idea.”
He started toward the building.

Thanks for stopping by!

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Posted on September 14, 2014, in Uncategorized. Bookmark the permalink. 13 Comments.

  1. No pressure or anything.

    I like this scene, Jeff. The Yiddish, “Phone Booth”, and Danny being Danny (and the fact that I know this is classic Danny already), and the anticipation of what might come next.

    Excellent. 🙂

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  2. I like the continued reference to the character by his description. Great device.

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  3. Love the visual of the guy!! Great snippet and leaves me wanting to know what happens next.

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  4. Oh, man, that’s a helluva way to express confidence in his friend’s abilities. Great snippet, Jeff. And good luck to Meyer, lol.

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  5. great job in describing the Phone Booth guy!

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  6. Great snippet!

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  7. I think he needs help with his plan and is about to get it.

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  8. From the outside looking in, his plan sounds a little risky. Love the ‘phone booth.’

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  9. I liked the tattoos part. Easy to picture and yet made me want to know more.

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  10. Great visuals — really pulled me into the scene. And despite the looming potential confrontation it was a fun read.

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  11. sorry for the late post. Loved the visual in this scene. Can’t wait for more next week.

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  12. Love the descriptions–great job. Sorry this is late.

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  13. That sounds like a frontal attack, what kind of plan is that? I like it though.

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