#SnippetSunday – As Yet Unnamed WIP (Vigilante/Noir) – August 10, 2014

Snippet Sunday is a Facebook group for writers I’ve been privileged enough to have been accepted into.

From the group guidelines;

“Welcome to Snippet Sunday, where writers come together to share a few sentences of their current project–whether it’s a recently released novel, a WIP (work in progress), or an older manuscript that’s being revived. Intended to hook readers, gather feedback and build an author’s fan base, Snippet Sunday is the FB group that does all three.”

We find out a little more about the main character- Meyer Cranehaus- and his friend and mentor Danny Bergleson in this week’s snippet…

“Meyer, my boy,” said Danny, “have you given any thought to my proposal?”
He didn’t look up from his plate of chicken livers as he spoke. He knew better.
“No,” I replied. “Can’t say that I have.”
We’d been having the same conversation at the counter of the Moonstruck Diner on 23rd. after meetings, since the night of the Cindy incident.
Cindy, a regular at the 13th Street meeting, had a habit of collecting the wrong kinds of men. One of them– a biker type who wasn’t taking no for an answer– and two of his friends waited for her outside the building one night, seven months earlier.
“All I did,” I said, “was persuade those guys to leave her alone.”
Danny polished off his last bite of liver. then washed it down with a healthy swig of coffee.
“Yes. Yes you did.” He set his mug down and signaled for a refill. “You persuaded them right into the back of an ambulance.”
“Anyone would’ve.”
“This city would be a much better place if that were true.”

Thanks for reading!


Posted on August 10, 2014, in Uncategorized. Bookmark the permalink. 18 Comments.

  1. Man, I love this entire exchange, chicken livers to ambulances.

    I can see this scene—though I can’t quite decide if I’m seeing George Dzundza or Danny Aiello. 🙂


  2. I love this scene, especially the touch of humor provided by the chicken livers.


  3. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Love the easy banter over chicken liver. Well done.


  4. Sounds like the “persuasion” was pretty firm.


  5. Loving this whole thing…in snippets…really looking forward to seeing this all pulled together. You ALWAYS create such wonderful characters.


  6. Danny seems to have a very strong idea about what should be done. I wonder what the proposal is really about.


  7. Great snippet! The conversation and the bit of backstory work together seamlessly.


  8. Very nice way to show the backstory. Not a fan of chicken livers but it made the scene very real.


  9. Anyone may have wanted to do the same.
    But few would.
    Those few have the best stories.


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