#SnippetSunday – Night Train (Noir) – June 22, 2014

Snippet Sunday is a Facebook group for writers I’ve been privileged enough to have been accepted into.

From the group guidelines;

“Welcome to Snippet Sunday, where writers come together to share a few sentences of their current project–whether it’s a recently released novel, a WIP (work in progress), or an older manuscript that’s being revived. Intended to hook readers, gather feedback and build an author’s fan base, Snippet Sunday is the FB group that does all three.”

Today’s Snippet comes from the latest chapter of my serial noir novella, “Night Train”, set in 1928.

You can read the whole chapter here; http://picspiration.blogspot.com/2014/06/jeff-tsuruoka-week-103-night-train-part.html

It picks up right where last week’s snippet left off; Moe and Madeline are about to make their escape when the people they’re ducking finally catch up with them… Moe has already killed one enemy back in New York. How is he going to handle a run-in with another?

“I’ve had it with running, Madeline.”
“Beats going to your funeral,” she shot back. “I’d look awful in a black veil.”
I swallowed what remained of my indignation and followed her out the front door.
The thick woods obscured almost all of the moonlight, leaving the entire area shrouded in darkness.
We spotted the headlights in the distance right away. The sound of their engines cut through the trees.
This time we cursed in unison.
“I needed to see O’Shaughnessy sooner or later,” I grumbled.
“Gonna shoot him too?” She ran a nervous hand through her hair.
“I don’t know, babe. That kind of depends on him.”

Thanks for stopping by!

 

 

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Posted on June 23, 2014, in Uncategorized. Bookmark the permalink. 4 Comments.

  1. I love that last line! (And I love Madeline — she’s a great character!)

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  2. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Intense scene! Love the banter, too. Well done. I have to agree with P.T.. Love the last line. 🙂

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  3. SMOOTH WRITING. Great snippet. And I really like the last line too!

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  4. elainecsc2013

    Great last line, and the writing really is smooth as silk.

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