Mid-Week Blues-Buster Week 2.8 WINNERS
Week 2.8 of the Mid-Week Blues-Buster has come to a close.
Judge Bryan Tinker had some good stuff to read… Here are his decisions.
Several powerful stories from a song that has a pretty heavy topic. The range of dependency is well covered in the stories, from medical to recreational, and some of the lyrics in the song definitely spurred some creativity, especially the bit about “doctors with no faces”. It’s always hard to choose which stories fit in which places, and sometimes it just comes down to the way they capture the song of the week, at least for me.
First: Untitled by @drmagoo. Strong piece, with an unusual time labelled format. Good capture of the situation and the scene, the painful time of just waiting to die. Reality woven throughout with dreams, all coming tgoether one IV drip at a time. Also, it’s nice to see the Fates getting some attention. Very fresh way of describing that the doctors and nurses don’t see hope for recovery.
Second: Long Time Going by @mishmhem. Very strong descriptions, such as being kept on file or the reference to smoker’s fingers. Very well hidden twist at the end, but when going back and reading it again, it’s all right there. Very Sixth Sense-y and well executed. Plenty of room for the imagination to fill in the gaps that led her to this course of events, from the attraction they had before to finding them in this state.
Third: Kicking by @MissBliss. Very good descriptions of the agony and perspective of the detox process. The bit of exposition on the path down to addiction is a compelling reality. Very evocative and sad, with the helplessness of the victim as well as the nurses. The descriptions of the wasps and honey are very good.
Since I find my favorite part of weekly prompts is the feedback, I’m including notes for the other stories as well.
David Defeats the Phil E. Stein Army by @CharlesWShort. Fun twist on word choices and older stories in the title and character names. Love how the definition of “honest buck” shifts in interesting times. I especially like that the women were far from helpless. It’s interesting that the group is borderline incompetent and just trying to get ahead in the shifting world they find themselves in. Definitely a story of a world in which there really aren’t any “good guys”.
In Plain Sight by @FallIntoFiction. Good capture of the desperate and nearly mad verbal style. I could easily see that coming across the radio in a larger story. Love the direction taken from the lyrics of the song, with the facelessness. It’d be very hard to find support when everyone else thinks a person is crazy, even at the end of the world.
Mazel tov to all of our Winners.
Eric- here’s another Winner’s Badge;
Thanks to all of our readers & writers, and thanks to Judge Bryan Taylor.
See you on Tuesday…